tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post1889693712178152717..comments2024-03-28T02:36:30.029-04:00Comments on Jungle Red Writers: What We're Writing--In which Hank takes a step forwardJungle Red Writershttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16646429819267618412noreply@blogger.comBlogger40125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-78138510583682721222014-02-07T07:52:42.225-05:002014-02-07T07:52:42.225-05:00Love it, Hank, but I'm still puzzled over why ...Love it, Hank, but I'm still puzzled over why Jake left his sandwich if it was "carry-out"? Nowhere to stuff it? Almost done? Deluca clearly didn't get so strung-out that he left his coffee..and he seems to be taking it all pretty much without stressing over it. Great dichotomy of characters there, but maybe something to show the dilemma (Fish or cut bait - take the sandwich or leave it, one more bite? maybe it's not so good? I think I'd have him take it, even if he doesn't get to eat it anymore - can have him throw it away later, sad to do so, such a waste, you know.)Diane Schultznoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-17183583756436432552014-02-07T02:00:42.975-05:002014-02-07T02:00:42.975-05:00OK, I'm hooked - can't wait for the publis...OK, I'm hooked - can't wait for the published (and signed, hint, hint) book!<br />G.WriterCathttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13797103297058880301noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-64038000761994585842014-02-06T23:11:22.077-05:002014-02-06T23:11:22.077-05:00Thank you so much, you all! My fear and trepidatio...Thank you so much, you all! My fear and trepidation are completely erased! For today at least.. :-) <br /><br />And I am incredibly grateful for your enthusiasm and encouragement. You've given me good ideas and much reassurance.. I am so grateful..Hank Phillippi Ryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17420701704169428286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-7249463196752590342014-02-06T22:32:16.357-05:002014-02-06T22:32:16.357-05:00Fantastic, Hank! And as soon as I read Jake's...Fantastic, Hank! And as soon as I read Jake's name, I was already hooked...can't wait for another book in this series!! :)Elizabeth Heiterhttp://www.elizabethheiter.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-32573885608742186232014-02-06T21:34:21.040-05:002014-02-06T21:34:21.040-05:00terrific Hank--it feels so real!terrific Hank--it feels so real!Lucy Burdette aka Roberta Isleibhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04660402177299546055noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-23864164688960633432014-02-06T18:33:11.816-05:002014-02-06T18:33:11.816-05:00"This is never going to work. I’m not kidding..."This is never going to work. I’m not kidding. This is the worst thing ever."<br /><br />I love that even Hank Phillipi Ryan-who from where I sit has everything going for her-still has moments of doubt. Stacy Allenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03694644278817349493noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-41096338054281406802014-02-06T16:38:36.217-05:002014-02-06T16:38:36.217-05:00And somebody took picture of it . . .
And as you...And somebody took picture of it . . . <br /><br />And as your cops and cadets try to collect it, it is being posted on net as we speak.<br /><br />Sounds fantastic! TerriTerri Lynn Coophttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07290316565247120848noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-36783941758301662182014-02-06T16:23:35.972-05:002014-02-06T16:23:35.972-05:00Curley statue-- nice touch!Curley statue-- nice touch!Maureen Harringtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03499876353651763590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-74594805458396976632014-02-06T15:41:03.515-05:002014-02-06T15:41:03.515-05:00Oh, gee! I find that I NEED to know WHO called 911...Oh, gee! I find that I NEED to know WHO called 911! There you are with the suspense already, Hank! And I also got a creepy feeling about all the people who would take pictures of a victim; it seems so cold.<br /><br />I can't wait to read the entire book.Deb Romanonoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-83726075772418792692014-02-06T14:50:17.376-05:002014-02-06T14:50:17.376-05:00Wow, Hank! That's a terrific not-even-first-ro...Wow, Hank! That's a terrific not-even-first-rough-draft. Just finished The Wrong Girl and LOVED it!! So eager for the next installment :)Kimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15354719566758459929noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-64276183116611276572014-02-06T14:34:01.260-05:002014-02-06T14:34:01.260-05:00You pulled me right in with that first line, Hank,...You pulled me right in with that first line, Hank, and I didn't want to leave that scene.Carol Silvishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14782238478160905171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-65009488897031038422014-02-06T14:15:20.467-05:002014-02-06T14:15:20.467-05:00Hank, I love the conversation between you and your...Hank, I love the conversation between you and your husband. How nice to have a calming hand when one is being unreasonably frantic (because as your husband and we readers know, everything you write reflects your dedication to the highest quality writing and storytelling). I use my husband as a sounding board for the worst possible scenarios, too, and he calmly refutes such outcomes.<br /><br />It's so exciting to know that we have two more great books on their way to our reading nooks. <br /><br />Possibilities? Oh, yes. <br /><br />“Somebody saw something. And most of them took pictures of it.” Detective Jake Brogan watched the uniforms try to corral the chaos of tourists and brown-bag toting Bostonians as two crime scene units unspooled parallel rolls of yellow tape. <br /><br />Such a great opening. And, of course, you had me, a lover of alliteration, at "corral the chaos." Police often lament the unreliability of eye witness accounts, and you have magnified that problem tenfold. Now, that's interesting. Jake Brogan is so cool. I hope your doubts have been squashed.<br /><br />Oh, and I just saw where I won North of Boston, and I will send you my address, Hank. I have this one on my Amazon wish list as one of the books I wanted to order next. Excited I am! Kathy Reelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17004247271452356577noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-86823961572289322742014-02-06T14:13:08.557-05:002014-02-06T14:13:08.557-05:00I have come back and re-read these commments too m...I have come back and re-read these commments too many times. Just saying.. Hank Phillippi Ryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17420701704169428286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-32126350559616315912014-02-06T14:11:19.745-05:002014-02-06T14:11:19.745-05:00As a reader and not a writer, just this little bit...As a reader and not a writer, just this little bit seems so familiar and draws me in. Can't wait. Hurry up and finish!Grandma Cootiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10709540756822695170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-45973823041003083862014-02-06T14:02:16.233-05:002014-02-06T14:02:16.233-05:00Debbie Haupt..yes, indeed, we are in it together, ...Debbie Haupt..yes, indeed, we are in it together, sister.<br /><br />And Tammy K! #fixitlater ! I say it to myself EVERY DAY.<br /><br />LynnDee...xoxoo :-)Hank Phillippi Ryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17420701704169428286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-38835829592552498782014-02-06T14:00:45.720-05:002014-02-06T14:00:45.720-05:00Denise ANn, you are talking about one of te wonder...Denise ANn, you are talking about one of te wonders of the universe.<br /><br />DO I "Plan"? No, not at all. But do I see it happening? At some point, in every book, I do. Sometimes it's not until I'm finished. <br /><br />I adore it, every time. I'm always baffled and delighted with what the universe of our subconscious seems to create.<br /><br />Aren't you? Hank Phillippi Ryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17420701704169428286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-77259651754461667762014-02-06T13:58:26.326-05:002014-02-06T13:58:26.326-05:00Well, well, now. This turnedo ut to be unexpectedl...Well, well, now. This turnedo ut to be unexpectedly wonderful. Thank you! There's much to be said for sitting down at the computer to continue a story people seem to like, right? The extra juice that kind words provide?<br /><br />xoxooHank Phillippi Ryanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17420701704169428286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-48145390106755495022014-02-06T13:46:05.290-05:002014-02-06T13:46:05.290-05:00Great beginning, Hank! Great first line! And you...Great beginning, Hank! Great first line! And you're a very brave person to put it out there--the world's biggest writers' group:-)<br /><br />Can't wait to read more!Deborah Crombiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16988750789088153601noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-50948613136267730392014-02-06T13:05:36.296-05:002014-02-06T13:05:36.296-05:00The scene is so immediate and made me feel like I ...The scene is so immediate and made me feel like I was standing at Jake's shoulder feeling the weight of the crowd and the work to be done. Awesome!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-38878668639270162662014-02-06T12:37:00.797-05:002014-02-06T12:37:00.797-05:00Great start, Hank! Lots of possibilities with this...Great start, Hank! Lots of possibilities with this and the cameras set up so many things that could happen! Nice!Terry Ambrosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14859532145979982213noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-87486897596446193582014-02-06T12:16:42.902-05:002014-02-06T12:16:42.902-05:00You are a brave woman! I started Chapter 1 page 1 ...You are a brave woman! I started Chapter 1 page 1 three days ago. There are so many XXXs marking spots to go back and fix it's like an advertisement for a dirty movie. This is great!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07754229648422848542noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-64434870365553965522014-02-06T12:12:21.963-05:002014-02-06T12:12:21.963-05:00Oh, most definitely!
I want more (and right now!) ...Oh, most definitely!<br />I want more (and right now!) and I think that is a good indicator.<br />Go forth and write. We are waiting.Libby Doddhttp://www.libbydoddart.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-26393065386368046862014-02-06T11:59:20.990-05:002014-02-06T11:59:20.990-05:00Yay, Hank! Possibilities galore!
And thanks for s...Yay, Hank! Possibilities galore!<br /><br />And thanks for sharing the pre-firsty first draft in all it's not-so-messy glory. Lisa Alberhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12591430453957883948noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-22603013621274182262014-02-06T11:39:11.380-05:002014-02-06T11:39:11.380-05:00Corner of Congress was McD's. Guy in wheelchai...Corner of Congress was McD's. Guy in wheelchair " essentially in custody"?? Civil rights? A warrant ? Okay to not have one ? Sliced between the shoulder blades? The restaurant before " Bell in Hand" was a horrible place where I got food poisoning. ( The small long tailed rat moving along the wall should have been my first clue).Police officers now wear Seattle green vests.Mary Thawleynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1001156153899984046.post-37353451962825973662014-02-06T11:12:43.236-05:002014-02-06T11:12:43.236-05:00Oh, HANK! There are so many things I love here. Th...Oh, HANK! There are so many things I love here. That first line is a keeper. You can’t put it down without reading on to see what he’s talking about. <br /><br />Thanks so much for putting yourself and your emotions out there. It makes those of us following behind you feel oh so much better to know that even HANK PHILLIPI RYAN (picture that in marquee lights) has her doubts. Which are totally unfounded and you should abandon immediately. This is great stuff!<br /><br />Also, I think “shitshow” is my new favorite word. <br /><br />xoxo<br /><br />LynDeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14399945394854595567noreply@blogger.com