DEBORAH CROMBIE: This (see below) is beginning to look like a book, but it doesn't quack like a book quite yet.
I was making such progress on my poor benighted Kincaid/James #20, the end, if not in sight, was at least just over the horizon. Then, the past month I have been derailed by a number of things, including tax stuff and an excruciating repetitive stress issue in my left shoulder.
Thankfully, the taxes are done, the shoulder is finally better, and now I have got to dig back into my book and make my tortoise-like way towards the finish line.
It is so difficult finding little snippets in a crime novel that don't give away some part of the plot, but here is another little domestic scene for you:
Gemma woke with a start. The space beside her in the bed
was empty and cold—Duncan must have been up for a while. Even Geordie was gone
from the foot of the bed. Squinting, she groped for her alarm and saw that it
had been turned off. Sounds began to filter in from the rest of the house, the
children’s raised voices, a bark from Tessa. The smell of coffee drifted up the
stairs. “Bugger,” she whispered. She was late. Duncan should never have let her
sleep.
Slipping out of bed, she showered hurriedly, then dressed
once more in her new navy suit. She didn’t wear black, so navy was the closest
thing she had to a power suit if she was going to beard Pine in his office
first thing.
Downstairs, she found Duncan and all three children in the
kitchen, the children in their school uniforms and eating the last of toast and
soft boiled eggs, Duncan with a mug of coffee in one hand and a hairbrush in
the other as he tried to manage Charlotte’s curls. “Here, let me,” she said,
taking the brush and the hair elastic from him. “You shouldn’t have let me
sleep.”
“I thought you needed it. You looked exhausted last night.
And I’ll do the school run, don’t worry.” He wrapped an arm round her shoulder
and kissed her on the forehead. “You have can have some toast and coffee in
peace when we’re gone.”
Wrinkling her nose, Gemma said, “Ugh, no. I’ll grab
something later. I need to go.” Finishing Charlotte’s hair, she leaned down to
give her a kiss. “There you go, lovey. You look like a princess.”
“I’m not a princess, I’m a unicorn,” Charlotte told her, a
frown creasing her small face.
Gemma had half expected Charlotte to protest her not taking
the school run, but instead Charlotte said, “Papa, we need to go. Miss Jane has
a surprise this morning and Oliver said we should be first.” Oliver was her
best friend and considered himself the leader of their daring duo.
“Okay. I’ll see you later.” Gemma stooped and tried to give
Charlotte a cuddle, but Charlotte jiggled impatiently. The boys were already
heading for the door, rucksacks swinging from their hands.
“Bye, Mum,” called Toby. “Are you taking me to ballet?”
“I’ll try,” said Gemma, knowing full well that it was
unlikely. “If I can’t, Bodie will take you.”
“Bye, Gem,” echoed Kit.
“I’ll ring you if we turn up anything.” Duncan waved at her
as he scooped up Charlotte’s backpack, and then they were gone.
It seemed like only yesterday that Gemma had had to carry a
weeping, protesting Charlotte up to the door of her of school so that Miss
Jane, the headmistress, could take her from her arms. She should be glad to see
Charlotte so independent—she was glad, she was glad to see all
the children so grown up and self-sufficient. But something in her felt it as a
loss, too, and tears pricked beneath her eyelids.
She shook her head in annoyance and blew her nose with a
sheet from the kitchen roll. Something about this case was making her feel
unusually emotional and that was a weakness she couldn’t afford.
As you can see from the photo, I still print a paper copy of my manuscript in progress, usually a chapter at a time. I find I catch a lot more mistakes on paper than I ever do on the screen--and there are always things that spell check doesn't catch.
And, also, I have to admit, seeing that growing stack of pages is both satisfying and encouraging. IT WILL BE A BOOK, it really will!
Fellow REDs and writer pals, do you still print paper drafts of your work in progress?
And readers, are there things that you find still work best on paper?
Gemma and Duncan are quite a team . . . thanks for sharing this with us . . . .
ReplyDeleteI much prefer paper in hand to reading on my computer screen . . . it's so much easier to read/proof . . .
What a perfect domestic scene. I think I want to marry Duncan! Thank you for sharing. As for printing things out, yes, I always do. Partly to read in a different medium, the more easily to see errors, but also partly, as you say, to hearten myself that I'm making progress. (Selden)
ReplyDeleteToilet tissue.
ReplyDeleteJerry, my husband uses paper towels. He's a heathen.
DeleteKaren, I hope for your the sake of your septic tank/sewer system your husband does NOT use paper towels for TP. Elisabeth
DeleteLOL! No, just for his nose. At any rate, he is the one who monitors the septic system.
DeleteDebs, thanks for the snippet. I love the family you created for Gemma and Duncan.
ReplyDeleteI love the domestic scenes as much as I love the mysteries. I know that is the reason that I prefer series. The first Gemma and Dunca book that I read was THE SOUND OF BROKEN GLASS. It was in my local library so I picked it up. When I got to the part where Gemma reminisces about having been Duncan's sargeant when they became lovers, I knew I had to read the series from book #1. Great mysteries. Great family story!
I can read books on my Kindle or even on my phone, although I prefer paper. But I must have a recipe printed out.
DEBS: I enjoyed the snippet of the family getting ready for another busy day. I love that you show how Gemma & Duncan have busy personal lives in addition to their police duties.
ReplyDeleteWhen I was writing technical reports at Environment Canada, I printed & edited from hard copies of drafts.
As I prepare to leave home this weekend on my way to Osaka, Japan, I have printed out a bunch of useful guides, lists & 1 pager of the complicated Osaka metro and railway map. But I switch to using Google Maps on my smartphone when I get on the street.
Have a great trip Grace!
DeleteSafe travels, Grace!
DeleteHave a great trip Grace! Food report required when you return!!
DeleteGrace, happy travels! Looking forward to seeing your photos.
DeleteI only saw the airport in Osaka before picking up the Hello Kitty train to Kyoto this year. After reading about the amazing food scene, I regretted not spending a few days there. And enjoy Expo 2025!
DeleteHave a fabulous trip, Grace! Safe travels.
DeleteDebs, so glad to hear your shoulder is better and you are ready to tackle the book again! I rarely print things out these days, edit right on the computer.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Roberta! And I always do several edit passes on the computer, but I still need one more on paper.
DeleteYes to paper edits and I love watching the kids grow up.
ReplyDeleteMe, too, Margaret! At least I can slow them down a bit, unlike my "growing like a weed" granddaughter! This is why I try to space the books only a few months apart. At least I have a couple more years with Kit at home. Sob.
DeleteOoh, I can't wait, Debs! So glad your shoulder has healed.
ReplyDeleteYes to paper printouts. I have a couple of friends who keep me supplied with one-side printed paper, plus Jay's sister (who I've never met). I usually print the whole book at least twice. Once after I've made tweaks and revisions to the first draft, and again near the deadline. Sometimes if I've been away from the WIP for a while, I'll do another read-on-paper session. It's the only way for me to get the overview of the whole story.
Edith, your books are so clear of those annoying little errors, the kind that should be edited. I bet your reading of the paper copy helps to correct them before they escape notice
DeleteI agree about the overview, Edith. I was actually doing a read-though of the manuscript to date when I got derailed by the tax stuff. I can't do the one-side printed paper, though. I don't know why but it really bugs me!
DeleteDebs, I’m so glad your shoulder is getting better, the taxes are dealt with, and the book is PROGRESSING, I can hardly wait to preorder it! Great morning scene with the family! I love the photo of the papers on the typewriter. I am a lousy typist so I do prefer iPads and laptops for that. Otherwise I prefer paper, especially for book reading! Even when we travelled to London and Scotland in May we took paperback with us.
ReplyDeleteI love my vintage Smith-Corona, and it does work! Maybe I need to switch from the laptop to the typewriter to jump start my brain!
DeleteThank you for the snippet Debs. I’m glad you’re feeling better.
ReplyDeleteI’m so looking forward to your next book and to reconnect with Gemma, Duncan and family and friends.
I think that maybe it’s the different way to look at a text that allows you to see the mistakes. When I was writing my autobiography, I did the opposite of you, I wrote by hand and than typed and printed a copy to catch the mistakes. It worked.
Yes, Danielle, I think part of it is the switching up. And kudos to you for writing your book by hand!
DeleteI found changing the font size up 2 sizes, and reading it in pdf, for some reason popped the spelling and grammatical errors. Also reading it at least 3 times at least a day apart - cleanses the brain, maybe?
ReplyDeleteI need the newspaper for real, in a chair. No on-line reading it. I do read other newspapers (The Guardian) on line, but local, mostly for the obits needs to be real. They soon will be pricing themselves out of us getting it - very expensive for obits and firestarter!
I dramatically preferred the newspaper in print, too. Ultimately chose to give it up, though, when home delivery became so unreliable that I was reading it online several days a week anyway. We decided we might as well pay the lower online only rate. I have adjusted, but it took a while. Sigh.
DeleteMargo, I've been making firestarters, since we have a lot less newspaper around than we used to. Toilet paper rolls, stuffed with dryer lint, a real cork (champagne corks work best, but we don't get many of those!), maybe a pine cone and/or some dried acorns, and a bit of shredded paper, along with a chunk of candle wax. Stubs are perfect. I used to melt the wax, stand all the rolls on end, and then pour it over, but that is a big mess. Then I wrap the rolls in leftover tissue or other paper and twist both ends. Keeps everything tidy, and the tissue paper ignites fast.
DeleteI was worried about what the wax would do to our chimney, but we just had it swept and the sweep congratulated us on burning good fires, so I guess we are all good.
Now I wish I had a fireplace - I would love a good use for dryer lint.
DeleteWe have two wood stoves, both of which do not make it through the night unless someone gets up to feed them - worse than a newborn, so no to that! The newspaper is used as the torch to start them up. As for the 'starter' - we use wood pellets. Toss a handful underneath the kindling if you have any, which we usually don't and light. They catch quickly, and burn hot, so make a good ash for everything to catch. They are often cradled in a dirty egg carton (mush stuff not styrofoam) that I will not sell eggs in. I cannot believe how many people that I should be grateful that they returned a whole bunch of dirty or ripped cartons - yuck! (rant over...). Our chimney suffers from chicken bones and oyster shells - yes, I know I am not supposed to burn them, but the have to go somewhere. The ash is then recycled through the garden.
DeleteOh, and there is a dearth of champagne in this house...
DeleteWe sadly canceled the print version of our local paper after decades of subscribing, but it was just SO expensive. I still read it online but it's not the same. We then increased our paper NYT to 7 days instead of weekends because they gave us a good deal (much cheaper than local paper) but I think we will go back to just weekends. That way I can look forward to the paper on Friday, and we'll have enough newspaper for tasks.
DeleteNot for firestarters, though. Our fireplace has a gas line, so we are very spoiled.
I used to use paper egg cartons, too. My neighbor who sells eggs now uses the cutest octagonal egg cartons. I always return them to her--clean. Should I not, Margo? She sells her eggs so cheaply compared to the grocery store, and I know she has to buy these cartons.
DeleteIt was a wonderful peek into the usual morning lives of Gemma's family! I have missed them. But uh oh, she's feeling emotional. If this were a soap opera we know what that would mean. What has made her a bit weepy here? Can't wait to get the book in my hands!
ReplyDeleteYes, I like to print them out; seeing my words on actual paper makes it more real.
Well, it's a very stressful case!
DeleteDebs - what a great family scene! I also enjoy your photos of your home, work, yard, etc. Thanks for sharing them.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Anon! I haven't been posting enough of the personal stuff lately. I kind of go in spurts, and I definitely loose my enthusiasm for the garden in the hottest part of summer. I will do better!
DeleteI’m sorry to hear you were having shoulder problems, but very glad you are feeling better, Debs. And, of course, I am excited for progress on Book #20!
ReplyDeleteI am a mixture of paper and digital. I make my grocery lists on my phone because I know I will have it with me. For things like to do lists around the house, I write those on a pad of paper or one of my son’s old spiral notebooks from high school. It feels so good to line through the accomplished tasks! — Pat S
I put to-do lists in my weekly planner, and for big projects in my "not for writing" spiral notebook. I don't manage to cross off tasks nearly as often as I'd like, unfortunately.
DeleteI can't wait for number 20! I'm glad your shoulder is improving. Ouch! My brain does seem to handle printed material better than scrolling on line. For instance, I would much rather have a paper copy of the tax instructions than try to go through it on line.
ReplyDeleteOh, gosh, yes, Gillian. Anything with complicated instructions I need to read on paper!
DeleteGlad your shoulder is feeling better, Debs. That sounds pretty miserable.
ReplyDeleteWhat Pat S. said. The list app on the phone is a gamechanger! I always leave paper lists behind, but on my phone I have them categorized: Kroger, Produce store, Costco, hardware store. I keep a running list of what I need, and add to it as necessary.
However, Steve and I have been editing one another's writing since before we were married, always on paper. I learned how to use the collaborative editing features in Word when I was writing for Cincinnati Magazine, but Steve is hopeless with it. So we use red pencils. Like Edith, Steve, especially, has used the blank side of used paper for decades.
I am a real Luddite with my little spiral notebook with my running grocery lists. But I can put it in the cart basket to look at while I'm shopping, where as you can't--or at least you shouldn't--do that with a phone. I know at least half a dozen people who've had their phones stolen that way.
DeletePurses, too! I am always astonished when a woman leaves her purse gaping open and wanders away. I just leave that app open, and slip my phone back into a pocket.
DeleteI have followed Deb for about 25 years, so I am always thrilled when I hear we're nearing a new release. Loved this snippet!
ReplyDeleteI have become pretty comfortable with reading most things online, but for proofreading I am much more effective with a hard copy. There is just something that seems to work differently in my brain when reading words on paper. Before I retired, I was often treated as a valued "last set of fresh eyes" on important documents in our office, and my colleagues all knew I needed a hard copy of the final product in order to add the most value.
My husband always has me proofread whenever he is sending out letters or documents.
DeleteFirst, happy to hear your shoulder issues have healed and the taxes taken care of, and back to writing!! This snippet is like a visit with old friends--catching up on their lives, handing a tissue to Gemma.... thanks for sharing it!
ReplyDeleteI no longer print anything out as I'm working because three printers in a row went bottoms up on me, but I agree that I see things on the printed page that my eyes skip over on the screen. Some research was recently published on creativity--writing by hand vs. typing on a keyboard. The brain actually lights up differently for writing by hand. I know that I can move forward with a writing project wholly using my computer, but I also know that I'm often surprised by what happens when I reach for a pad of paper and a pencil instead.
Anon Flora, above :-)
DeleteYes, the brain/hand connection is so interesting. I can't imagine writing an entire manuscript by hand, but I write lots of notes on paper, I brainstorm on paper, and when I take a notebook upstairs with me at bedtime I will often write entire scenes as they come to me. I often think about the great Victorian novelists writing such long books by hand--talk about repetive stress injuries!
DeleteFlora, time for a new printer!
DeleteSo glad to hear your shoulder is behaving again. I love the glimpse into a school morning with Gemma, Duncan and family. It reminds us they are more than their job designations and that, to me, is important in this genre.
ReplyDeleteWhen I am working on a project that drags into multiple pages or is VERY important, I always print it out. Like you, I can more easily spot errors in a new medium. Screens are not friendly to my eyes and error-catching ways. -- Victoria
I love Gemma and Duncan's house. It seems like a real place to me!
DeleteDEBS: What a lovely domestic scene. I was wondering if the kids like "bread soldiers" with their eggs? For some reason I imagine that British actress Claire ? Price ? as Gemma and Patrick M ? (the actor from Inspector Alleyn) as Duncan.
ReplyDeleteRegarding paper, I find it easier to read paper copies instead of my computer. I wrote a piece for a friend's anthology (memoir / non fiction). Before I could write the piece, I needed to be able to read the printed papers with the questions. I discovered that when I wrote what I thought was Word Document, it was actually Pages document on my computer! I finally figured out how to convert the Pages to the Word document. All I had to do was type in the question on a search engine and the answer helped me. On another note, I love that photo of the typewriter with the papers. Is it a Royal typewriter?
p.s. So glad your shoulder is healing and the tax stuff is done, Debs.
DeleteDiana, do you mean the actress Claire Foy, who played the young Queen Elizabeth II in The Crown? If so, I think that’s a great idea for casting!
DeleteOops, that was me, Pat S.
DeleteSorry, I meant for my comment below to go here as a reply, Diana and Pat!
DeleteOh, Diana, yes, the children do like bread soldiers with their soft-boiled eggs! :-)
DeleteClaire Foy is a great suggestion for Gemma, Diana. If they could start shooting tomorrow, as she's already forty-one. Patrick Malahide, unfortunately, is eighty! I wouldn't have seen him as Duncan even before he aged out of the part, however. I adore Matthew Goode, and he was a prospect for Duncan a few years when one TV company was interested. I'm so sorry we missed the boat on that one!
ReplyDelete"a few years ago" I seem to need to edit my comments on paper!
DeleteIf I were not retired, there would be more paper work. Although since I retired just as courts were beginning to permit e-filing of court documents, perhaps not. Current “pen and paper” : grocery lists and my journaling, checks, and short notes on greeting cards. Until the last 18:months or so, personal letters were hand written, but arthritis has made that too uncomfortable. I do print out a draft version of the letters for proof reading…”fat thumbs” independent of arthritis. It must be so satisfying, Deborah, to see the stack and to feel the heft of what you’ve written. Keep writing until The End are the only words left! Elisabeth
ReplyDeleteAw, thank you, Elizabeth! That's so kind!
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